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Post by jmc1800 on Apr 9, 2010 20:16:28 GMT -5
very cool.
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 9, 2010 20:30:24 GMT -5
I ran into the army of demons and one picked me up, I slid my blades out and started to jab him in the chest with them. When I dropped I felt great pain in my back, “agh!” I yelled in pain and stepped forward. I turned around to see josh leave a huge mark on my face, of blood! I jumped at him and swung my blades toward his stomach, but I missed. He slashed my across the stomach, I bent forward and he grabbed my head and kneed my forehead. Kaleb jumped at him behind me with a long, steel blade and stabbed josh in the arm. Josh stuck him claws into kalebs stomach and threw him behind him. “Kaleb!” I yelled, got up and slashed him across the face, when he turned around my blade went into his back and out his stomach. He turned around and cut me in the arm, he tried to cut me again but I separated him from his claws, and now ragged shards were left on his fingertips. He gave me a dirty look and jabbed the ragged claws into me. This hurt twice as bad. I fell to the ground and he put his foot on my neck, aiming. Then stomped on it. Once, twice, the third it didn’t hurt, but everything became blurry. I saw a shard of metal beside me and it was glowing. God was with me on this! I clenched it in my fist. I felt metal come over my face, then dark glass come over my eyes. Then metal stretch from my neck to my feet, and blades came from my boots, gloves, shoulders, hips and sides of my head. “Oh yeah, game on bud!” I said then looked at josh right before he shoved his head into my stomach. I jumped toward him and slashed at him, when he tried to slash me his arm came in front of me then no where, it came off! I kicked him in the chest and he skidded across the battle field, but he was smiling, and he pointed down, I looked down and saw something beeping, two seconds later it blew in my face. I flew down onto my back. Now had part of my mask, a small bit of my torso, and most of my leg armor. I ran toward him, but he shot at me. It went into my chest, but I kept on going. He shot again and again. But always failed to kill me. My blades came out of my wrists delivering blood to my wrists and also the blades. I jumped at him as he ran toward the building and lodged my blade into his temple. I grabbed him by his shirt, “When do you die!? When do you give up! Cant you understand, that your no match for me, if you want we can always fight, and you can die everyday of your life, and I will get control of your army, and turn them against you, and…” I stopped myself, because I remembered how to get rid of him, not kill him but keep him away for a long time to come. To throw him in hell, in the lake of fire! I dragged him by his shirt. Demons blocked the doorway to the lake of fire but I busted flames from my hands and killed them. And threw josh into the fire. I saw his skin start to burn and peel off him and watched him burn and fall over, now he got to live eternally in that place, I was proud of it. Jessica and kaleb came with the teleport… “So you did it, oh yeah and, so do you want to be you know…” I didn’t let her finish, I kissed her, “I know what you mean, yeah I do…” I said with a smile, she smiled at me, I clenched the teleport and we disappeared.
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Post by jmc1800 on Apr 10, 2010 18:43:59 GMT -5
very nice.
but as some friendly critisism, you might want to not use the same adjective for the same sentance. Like, "I jumped toward him and slashed at him, when he tried to slash me his arm came in front of me then no where, it came off!"
You use slash alot. Try to use a different adjective next time.
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 10, 2010 19:11:09 GMT -5
well i cant think of anymore
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Post by jmc1800 on Apr 10, 2010 19:40:50 GMT -5
go onto a word document and type slash then right click it and hold your mouse over the synonyms button and out pops a list of words that mean slash.
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 10, 2010 19:50:57 GMT -5
ok thx
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Post by jmc1800 on Apr 10, 2010 20:00:13 GMT -5
no problem! lol
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 10, 2010 20:24:47 GMT -5
When I could see I stepped in front of the throne and kneeled. “Stand up.” God said to me and raised his hand. I obeyed, “you have no reason to bow down you have done us good.” He said with a smile. I smiled at him, “agh!” kaleb yelled in pain, “crap!” I yelled and ran to him. “Dude, im going to die…” he said calmly, “no, no, no! You’re my best friend I have lost enough people to josh already and you’re not going to be one of them!” I said and stuck my arm out and it started to glow blue. I put my hand on his chest and pushed on it. When I took it away it was healed. “It is time to make the new world…
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Seven years later…
“Hey guys!” I yelled. I ran up behind kaleb and Jessica and put my arms around their shoulders, “hey, do you remember our homework?” kaleb asked, “nope…remember im the fierce one, but also the stupid one.” I said with a laugh. “You aren’t stupid.” Jessica said and hugged me. I just stared at her with a straight face, and then broke out in laughter so hard that I hit the ground… “School today is canceled.” The television said as I jumped in the air. “Yeah!” I yelled and ran outside and met up with Kaleb and Jessica, then I saw a dark figure in the distance and it started walking towards me. “Guys! What is that!” I yelled and moved their heads to where it was. “What, I don’t see anything.” Jessica said as I fell over. I was pushed by the figure, I tried to grab it to throw it off me but my hands just went through it. It just stared at me then disappeared into thin air…
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Post by jmc1800 on Apr 11, 2010 19:22:40 GMT -5
exiting, but God wouldn't say that you don't bow down to him. he isn't like that. we always need to bow down and worship Him.
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 11, 2010 19:52:46 GMT -5
no as in he was like congragulating me or something like that i know we need to be bowing down to him...
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 11, 2010 22:15:51 GMT -5
im christian i just conant think of anything else...
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 13, 2010 20:32:59 GMT -5
I pushed open large double doors and walked up to god. “We have bad news.” I started, “There is no bad news or good news, only news…” he said to me. “A demon has entered heaven…” I finished and looked at him; he stared at me for a couple seconds, “That is bad news…” he said. “But, can’t you defeat him like you did josh?” he asked me, “no… when I tried to fight it I just went through it…” I said sadly. “You can defeat it, you can’t defeat it because you have lost faith, and trust, and happiness.” He told me strictly, “how did you figure out that im not happy?” I asked quickly, “I have been watching you…” he said with a smile. I bowed to him and left the building. Right as I opened the door I saw the figure again. “I think I need to go to sleep for tonight…” I said to myself and ran off to my house. I lay down on my bed and quickly fell asleep… when I woke up a hand was my mouth and a knife was in my chest. I kicked and punched for the thing that was doing this to me. I opened my eyes and pure, red, glowing ones were staring into mine. Come on, be happy, believe… I thought, then tried to grab it but I couldn’t, my door opened and the thing vanished. “Oh my god, are you ok?” Jessica yelled in horror. “No I just have a knife in my chest for the fun of it, of course im not ok!” I yelled. “ok this is enough, you may not see that creature but I do and if you wouldn’t of come it would have killed me today!” I yelled. She out her hand on my shoulder, “its okay you’re just tired, having illusions…” she told me, I grabbed her hand and threw it away from me, which made her stumble to the side. “I don’t need to be told im having illusions this does not look like an illusion, would if your next, if it kills me then kills you, I wouldn’t be able to live with myself if anything happened to you!” I scolded her. I fell back asleep and woke up to the screaming of Jessica. “Crap!” I yelled and jumped out of my bed, remember me believe, believe! I thought and looked around the corner, it was about to stab Jessica, I jumped towards it and tried to stab it but I went through it again. So I quickly stepped in front of Jessica and the blade pierced into my shoulder. Then it disappeared into thin air once again. “Now do you believe me!?” I asked her angrily and shook her by her shoulder. “How did that not hurt?” she asked, “it did, don’t change subjects!” I scolded her. She stood up and gave me a hug, “ouch!” I yelled, “Shoulder…” I finished. “Now…we need help…
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 17, 2010 13:54:44 GMT -5
thats the end now im starting a new book called [PROTOTYPE]. hope you guys like it
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 17, 2010 14:12:21 GMT -5
I woke up and looked down at my body; there were needles in me… I felt pain as my arms started to ache, I looked at my arm and the veins in my arm started to snap in half and attach themselves to different veins. And my lower arm became a long aluminum sword. No I promised myself I wouldn’t let this happen I though, “Agh!” I yelled and ripped the needles from my body and ran for the door, “stop!” they yelled and shot at me, the bullets pierced into my body but I felt no pain, I walked toward them and cut them across the chest. Then walked out the door leaving what had happened behind me…
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5 years later…
I was pushed by a body guard, “get out of here you useless punk!” he yelled at me and pushed me again, I turned my hands to claws and jabbed them into him. “Sorry, but this is important.” I said with a grin. I took his uniform and put it over my cloths. I walked into the president’s room. “What is wrong?” he asked me. “I looked up at him and smiled “its you!” he yelled and called for security. I turned my hands into boulders and smashed them with them. I walked toward the president and sliced my sword into his stomach and out his back, I pulled up and he was cut in half. “I think he went this way!” I heard a guard yell, then I heard large footsteps. Hunters! I thought right as a large red creature dropped from the ceiling, it looked at me, it had no eyes but a nose which it saw out of, it opened its mouth, there were probably 100 razor sharp teeth in his mouth, he screeched and five more dropped from the ceiling. “crap!” I yelled, ran towards the wall, and plowed through it, but I had forgotten that it was a 50 floor building. I caught my feet on the wall of another building and started to sprint up it as fast as I could. I flipped onto the roof when I was near the top. There was a tank below me; it shot a missile at me. I concentrated, grabbed it as it came at me and turned it around, and it flew into the tank, I dropped to the ground. “What are you?” an army man asked me in horror. “I am…..” I started and shot him in the head. “I am the prototype!” I yelled and ran away from the battle field as the hunters came to have their meal…
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Post by wpp1000 on Apr 17, 2010 17:28:31 GMT -5
I came into a building; it was my house, an abandoned warehouse. I put on new cloths, dark blue jeans, a white dresshirt, and a grey hoodie. “Hey dude, is this true, that you murdered the president?” I heard Kayla’s voice behind me. I turned around so I could see her. Kayla and Skyler were standing at the doorway, Skyler dressed in a t-shirt, leather jacket and jeans, and Kayla was just in a sleeveless shirt and jeans. “He was involved with what they did to me…” I said grumpily. “So you killed him?” Skyler yelled angrily. “Don’t get me angry…” I said darkly. “Why, what are you going to do kill me too?” he said with a grin. I felt sadness in me like I betrayed them. “Forget you guys!” I yelled and jumped out into the street and ran into the distance. “Wait!” I could hear Kayla calling to me. I ran to central park and sat down by the lake. My phone started to ring, “hello?” I spoke into it. “Come back so we can experiment more or we will be forced to kill you.” it said. “Hmm, let me think, never!” I yelled into it. “Fine, send the destroyer in!” he yelled. I hung up the phone and the lake turned to blood. I looked forward; there was a strong looking man across the lake. The destroyer! I thought and started to run to a building. I jumped and started to sprint up I flipped onto the building and started to run forward. The building came to an end but it was too high for me to jump. I turned around and a razor blade was coming at me. I ducked backwards; I sideways flipped, dodging his claws. I picked up an air conditioner and threw it at him, he punched it and it came back at me. When I woke up I was falling threw the air. Slits came into my upper arms and I started to glide. I glided down to the building. There was no trace of the destroyer…
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