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[wpp1000]

wpp1000's stories

[wpp1000]

Shoot, im late.” I said as I started to run to my car. It started to drive away; I noticed my good friend kaleb was driving. He quickly opened the door while he drove with one hand, “get in.” he said as I stated to run next to and it a mail box appeared in front of me, I quickly jumped onto my houses fence and started to run on it, I quickly dove into the car as it turned onto the highway. “It’s about time you got here zeik!” kaleb yelled at me while I started to laugh, “you know that was kind of fun.” I said as I punch him softly on the arm and looked foreword. “Stop!” I yelled and we both push on the brakes, “what nothings wrong!” he yelled, “switch me seats!” I told him quickly, and drove into the other lane behind us we saw a crack come into the ground as a semi truck slipped into it and exploded. “Drive!” kaleb told me and hit the wheel. “I can do that with pleasure!” I yelled and stomped on the pedal and the car puffed smoke and fled the scene. I looked into the mirror, opened my door, and jumped out onto the rode. As a mail truck passed me I jumped onto it and rode on top of it until the accident. And jumped off, and collapsed on the ground. “Agh!” I yelled as I looked at my arm, there was a gash going down the bottom of it and the sleeve of my shirt was torn off. I jumped toward the hole and caught an old woman that was about to fall off. I looked at all the cars, they were all empty. So I jumped in one and parked it next to the gap, and did that to the next few of the cars. Now the hole had a car barrier. Every adult was swearing at me, and one even pulled a pistol out. He started to shoot bullets at me, and I ran up to him and punch his arm, and took the gun and threw it into the gap. I turned around, grabbed the guy by the head, and threw him to the ground and he was knocked out. I called 9-1-1 and ran off kaleb drove back to me and I jumped on the car and kaleb drove off with me on the back of it. I crawled in the trunk and got inside of the car and into the passengers seat, “is this the end?” kaleb asked me quickly. “Yes, it’s the end.” I replied, “thank god!” he yelled to the heavens. “It’s the end of the beginning.” I replied, and he looked at me with hesitation, “I am chosen to stop the end of the world…

[kly445]

Not bad, dude. But you might wanna use 'yell' and 'yelled' a little less and capitolize nouns like "Kaleb", and the beginings on sentences.

[wpp1000]

I woke up to Kaleb’s voice, “Zeik get up!, you need to see this.” he said as he shook my body, eventually, I got up and looked out the window up the front of the truck, “holy-” I stopped myself. There were volcanoes everywhere we could see! I jumped out of the truck while taking my jacket off. I ran up a hill, but I couldn’t see if it was a volcano or not because it was covered in smoke, but I saw a man up at the top, “hey! Get down!” I yelled so he could hear me over all of the noise. He turned around and winked at me and jumped off and perished inside the lava. Right as he hit it there was an explosion that blew me down the volcano. I hit the ground. “Kaleb! Kaleb!” I called for him as he ran to me, look who I found.” Jessica walked from some smoke, “hi zeik.” she said politely, that sorta got annoying after a while, “hey, kaleb help me get back to the truck.” I told him and he picked me up, and got me to the truck. “get in…” I said calmly even though I was very not calm, so they got in I I stepped on the pedal and the road in front of us started to fade away. I stomped on the pedal and the truck flew into the air as we hovered above the hole in the road. “what happens now?” Jessica asks me. I just stare into the distance for a while, then answered, “we head east to the only place that’s safe.” I said quickly as I started to drive again, “to the under ground shelter…

[kcb500]

Good, but maybe you want to slow it down a bit. You don't want to confuse your readers. It's sounds like 2012... Other than that good job.

[wpp1000]

thats sorta the point its about a guy(zeik) trying to stop the end of the world in other cases 2012.

[jmc1800]

cool, i like that im in it! lol

[wpp1000]

yeah il havve my next chapter up soon im working on it right now

[jmc1800]

Cool, ill read it, you can count on that!

[wpp1000]

“I think I broke my leg…” I said quicklyas I drove with my good leg, “what? When?” Jessica asked quickly, “Hmm… think about that for a second then answer.” I said with a laugh. “Watch out!” kaleb yelled and shook my arm, there was the old lady walking across the street. “I can’t brake, or steer!” I told them in a worried voice. The old lady suddenly started to glow black and turned to josh as the wheels tumbled on top of him. I jumped out of the car and tumbled onto the ground, “seriously after this, hospital!” I yelled to kaleb as he pulled me up. Josh was lying on the ground, “is he dead?” Jessica asked, “I pulled out his knife in his hand and, before I poked him with the handle, I stole his two pistols and hid them in my jacket. When I hit him with the handle of the knife his arm sprang foreword and grabbed my leg and gabbed a knife into it. I quickly limped back into the truck and got behind the wheel as Jessica and kaleb jumped in and I drove off to the city. When we got to the hospital kaleb and Jessica pretty much dragged me into the hospital, I got to my bed, and the doctor came in and checked me out, “to survive you’ll have to wear these special bandages to stop your bleeding or you can wear these cloths.” He said, I looked at the cloths I was pretty much a grey suit into a half mask at the face, and a black belt that I could put my guns in. “ill take both.” I said quickly and grabbed the bandages and put them on. I got back in the car normally, “so how do we figure out where josh is?” I asked kaleb, “I don’t know why?” he replied, “because I’m going to find him and kill him!” I yelled, “Why?” Jessica blurted out. “Because he is the one causing all of this, he not human, he’s the devil…

[kcb500]

“Because he is the one causing all of this, he not human, he’s the devil…

Lol, leave it to you.

[jmc1800]

Haha, nice! I like the way I talk in this book! Lol
Hey, nice book, I'll be waiting for the next chapter!

[wpp1000]

alright ill start on it after home work and if your sick jmc1500 hope you get better soon

[wpp1000]

i got notin give me ideas anything

[wpp1000]

“No…” my mother told me, sounding angry, “why not!?” I scolded her. “Because would if you don’t come back, what if you die out there.” She told me pointing out the window. “Mom no offense but, think about that for a second, I can fight with any weapon, I have weapons, and I have really good agility.” I said furious at her. She just stared at me and nodded her head no. so I stomped off and slammed the door behind me and pulled my pistols out when I went into our workshop, my dad is a weapon designer, that’s where I learn. I quickly pulled scrap metal off the table and started to work. When I finished I had straps down my arm to my wrists, under the straps was and metal bar and at the wrist they went into five separate blades only going to my knuckles, when I spread my hand out they go off my fingers and become claws. “Now just to upgrade my suit…” I said and grabbed the suit my doctor gave me, and strapped metal strips onto it and they went all the way down to my ankles and I put a hood on it. So now I had two pistols, metal claws and an indestructible suit, I was ready to take josh on. I had it all planed out Jessica knew how to fly a helicopter and Kaleb has a motorcycle I could use, but we would have to steal the copter…so I called them both up and the phone answered but it wasn’t them… “Josh where are they!” I practically screamed into the phone, “come to the U.S. army station and you’ll find out…” he said quickly and the phone hung up…, I got to the u.s. station and looked at the whole army pointing their guns at me, I heard josh yell “there is the demon, the one that has been causing this!” he yelled to the army. Suddenly acid busted from the surface and killed the army. I looked at josh and grinned at him, “so you decided to show up!” he yelled to me because I was so far away. “And no weapons? Dang you’re stupid…” he said with a chuckle. So I spread my hands out and my claws came from my knuckles…I ran at him and he grabbed me by my shirt and slammed my into a ruined building, I opened my eyes to him running straight at me with a knife in his hand. He stabbed at me but I ducked and the blade pierced into the wall. I stood up and jammed my claws into his chest, he pulled the knife out and swatted at me, but I threw myself to the side and dodged the shining blade. “Cody, Blake come kill this little turd…” he said happily. I smiled at the two men running at me, pulled out my pistols, crossed my arms and shot them both, I looked at josh and he had a pistol pointed at me. “do you really want to use your last bullet on me.” I told him calmly, “no, them.” He pointed two at Kaleb, and Jessica. “I stared at them and tore my claws and pistols off, “you win, don’t hurt them…” I told him, he shot at them right as I jumped in front of them and took the pain myself. Then I saw josh run off into the distance and disappear. I looked over at Jessica and kaleb, they were running for me. “Hey guys, guess this is the last time I get to see you.” I said calmly and started to cough. “no, we will get you to the hospital right now.” Jessica said sadly and kaleb and Jessica both got up. But I grabbed their arms, and looked at kaleb. “Kaleb, end it…” I said to him, “no, I wont kill you!” he yelled at me “do it now or ill kill you!” I yelled back, I watched him look at me and aim the gun toward my head I looked as if she was crying a bit, “don’t worry guys, it will all be ok…” I said and she smiled. I watched kaleb aim it at me angina and heard the gun fire. And the world faded to black…


End of part one…