ZEIK

[wpp1000]

this is about one kid that was beat up every day then he meets a stranger who teaches him to swordfight and he enters a compition.

[wpp1000]

Beads of sweat dripped down my face, I heard people around me shouting for my opponent. I threw a punch at him and he blocked it with his forearm. I ducked under his punch. He kicked my chest and I lost balance and hit the ground. He started to kick me in the side over and over. “Stop!” I yelled in anger, he smiled at me and kicked me in the face. And everything went black… I woke up in the nurse’s office, I looked down at myself and a lot of my shirt was ripped apart and there were cuts all over my body. I looked in the mirror and I had a black eye, a slit on my forehead. But my long, black hair covered it up, “You really took a beating out there.” The nurse told me as she sprayed something on my cuts. “Yeah I know, I was there.” I said with a grin. “You need to stop getting into fights. You suck at fighting.” She said with a laugh, I got up off the chair. “Thank you.” I said with a smile, “Your welcome, now have a lollipop.” She said and help one up, I laughed and patted her shoulder and walked through the door… I started to walk home and some guys walked up to me. One had a gun; I pushed them all out of the way and started to sprint across the sidewalk. I saw a man that looked like he was in his mid 20’s walk in front of the people. “It’s not nice to chase smaller boys than you.” he said with a smile, the guy threw a punch. The man ducked backwards, grabbed the guys forearm and threw him over himself. He took a knife in the guys belt, and started to fight with it, he swung it at a guy and stabbed him with it, the other guy shot at him and the man threw the knife into the guys stomach. “Follow me.” He said, and he just saved my life. So I’m going to trust him, he took me to a warehouse. He threw me a sword, “What is this for?” I asked, “I am going to teach you how to swordfight.” He said. “Yes.” I said with relief. “Think fast!” he yelled and swung at me and I blocked it with the side of my sword. I grinned at him and he continued to swing at me, each time I blocked it. I started to swing at him he blocked it, and again, and again. Then I slashed him across the face, he smiled and nodded at me. “Now go home, meet me here and we will do more tomorrow.” He said. I smiled, nodded, and ran out the door towards my house…

[kcb500]

Grrr. Careful I might have to delete this. You know what I'm talking about so don't ask. Other than that it's good. The only unrealistic part is when the nurse says. 'You suck at fighting.' An adult wouldn't put it that way.. Other than that good.

[jmc1800]

i know what this is about too....
yes. I have 3 suggestions...
1. same as kcb.
2. if some person came up to you with a gun, you don't just push them out of the way and jump on the sidewalk... no...
3. the last part??? ""I started to swing at him he blocked it, and again, and again. Then I slashed him across the face, he smiled and nodded at me. “Now go home, meet me here and we will do more tomorrow.” He said. I smiled, nodded, and ran out the door towards my house…"" you don't 'slash someone across the face', him smile and you go home.... no... he would bleed to death.

[wpp1000]

no he wouldnt its called a cut. those dont make you bleed to death. and he was training him.

[jmc1800]

then use a word that's not as forceful sounding as slash!
if it was a cut, then say cut! slash is a wound so big you might need stiches.

[wpp1000]

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I walked through the hallway to my locker, and then I saw Skye. I’ve had a crush on her forever, but she would never notice me. A nobody… a locker door hit my head and I fell backwards, I looked at her again. She was laughing and pointing at me, and I saw the guy who did it. He was doing the same; I got up and tackled him. I punched him across the face, I swung with my other fist, he grabbed it and I punched him with the other hand. I grabbed his head, pulled it up a little and slammed it into the hard, marble floor. He didn’t move, I knocked him out. Tow guys came at me I grabbed one of their shirts and slammed one into the other. I heard a gun shot, I looked down and there was a bullet hole in my stomach. I saw the man jump in but he didn’t do anything, then he threw me my sword. I smiled at him and nodded, I swung at a guy but he jumped backwards. One of the guys threw a punch and I ducked and slashed him across the stomach and he fell. I another guy pulled out a sword, I clashed mine into his. When the time was right I ducked under his tripped him and slashed him three times across the chest. There were bleeding, knocked out guys all around me. My sword was covered in blood; I nodded at the man and threw him back the sword. I looked back at Skye, “What a freak.” I heard her say to her friends, and she walked away…

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I sighed and turned around, I opened my locker. Nothing was there, on my birthday… I closed my locker and started to walk down the hallway… I got to the warehouse and my master was waiting in a chair, “You are late.” He said, smoking a cigarette. “I’m sorry master, just feeling sorry for myself, but I’m now ready to train.” I said and bowed, “Why were you feeling sorry for yourself?” he asked, “It’s my birthday, no one told me happy birthday or gave me anything or threw a party.” I said with a sigh, “hmm…” he thought out loud. He walked over to a showcase with a long black blade with a golden handle inside. He opened the window and took the sword out, and threw it to me. “Happy birthday.” He said with a smile. “Thank you my master. What is this blade made of?” I asked. “Meteorite.” He replied, “Wow.” I said with excitement. “Now let’s start training. Today I will show you how to use the hidden blade.” He said and threw me a large piece of metal attached to some straps. I strapped it to my arm and flung my wrist back and the long, steel blade came from my wrist. “Amazing.” I said, “Yes, it is. It is told to be the weapon of the assassins, but for you it is the ultimate swordfighter blade.” He said and set up some dummies. “Now stab one without getting within 10 feet of it.” He said, I saw some wooden crates then a wall that led right to the dummy. I jumped from one crate to the other and took three steps on the wall and jumped onto the dummy with my hidden blade in its head. “How was that?” I asked with a grin. “Good. Now time for the gun.” He said and passed me a pistol; I pointed it at some targets that were lined up. And shot through all of them with a single bullet. He put his hand on my shoulder, smiled, and nodded…

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I entered the warehouse and the man gave me fabrics. “You will need a costume.” He said, “Why?” I asked. “I signed you up for a sword fighting league and you are required a costume, weapons, and name.” he replied. I nodded and took the white and cut down it so I had half the fabric and attached it to a piece of leather and tied a rope to it. Then I took the red and made the inside of the cape shining red. Then I took some leather and made a large belt, and added it to the costume and then I took the white and cut some robes, I added some red to the bottom of the robes. I attached some leather ropes to the side to make a place to hold me sword. I strapped leather to my boot to hold my knife. I put my hidden blade on my left forearm, and I put the hood of my robes onto my head and over my eyes… “Are we there yet?” I asked impatiently, “Yes, we just arrived.” He said and the car stopped. I stepped out with my bag which had my costume and weapons in it. I looked at the opponent; he was putting heavy steel armor on. I got into the dressing room and put my costume on, and got my weapons where they needed to be, and stepped through the dark tunnel. When I came to the light I saw a huge crowd around the area where I would fight. Then my opponent waiting for me on the other side of the bridge, when I got there he cut me across the face and I pulled my hidden blade out and tried to stab him but he jumped back. I pulled my sword out and slammed it into his, he tried to swing under hand but I kicked it back and stabbed him with the hidden blade and threw him down. I jumped to the side as he tried to stab me. He got back up and tried to stab me again, but I let the sword go past me a little, then grabbed his handle, and elbowed him in the chest with my left hand then made the hidden blade come out and I slashed him across the face and he fell over sideways. The announcer came and lifted my hand up, “We have our winner!” he yelled, “What’s your name kid?” he asked me quietly. “Zeik.” I said, “No, I mean your fighting name.” he said with a laugh, “Oh, umm.” I looked at my hidden blade, “The assassin.” I replied. “The assassin wins!” he yelled, I looked down at my master, and he was smiling and nodding. I smiled; I won my first match…

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I stepped up to my locker which held my costume and weapons in it; I put on my costume and put my weapons where they were to be placed. I started to walk towards the dark tunnel and stopped, I thought I saw someone. I looked outside of the window in my locker room. And I saw Skye in the audience, and I blushed a little. I stepped through the dark tunnel and out onto the arena, “The assassin!” the announcer yelled as I walked to the center of the arena. “And the boulder!” he yelled and a strong looking man walked out, and pulled out a two handed golden sword. I pulled out my black meteorite sword, I swung at him and he knocked it out of my hand with his sword, he swung at me and I jumped back onto my hands, then my feet again. I heard the crowd cheer as I got up, I pulled out the dagger that was placed in my boot and swung at him, and he dodged it. He sung at me, and I ducked under the large blade, and then got back up. I slapped him across the face so hard that he spun around, I slashed at him but he jumped back. I tried to stab him but he grabbed my wrist, took my dagger and punched me in the chest so hard that I flew back and hit the ground. I looked at him and four strong looking men walked up behind him with maces and axes and swords. I ran up to one and kneed him in the chest and took him swords. I did a side flip and slashed one in the face then stabbed him and he fell over. I stabbed one guy with both swords then kicked him down. One guy dove at me; I ducked under him, stabbed him with both swords and threw him out of the arena. I ran towards the last two men jumped on them and stabbed both of them to the ground. I took my hood off and walked over to the announcer, he claimed me the winner. “Hey, can I use your microphone?” I asked and held out my hand, he nodded and handed me the microphone. “Hey, Skye. Will you go out with me?” I said into the microphone. She walked up onto the stage, “Yes, id love to go out with you.” she said and smiled, and hugged me…

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“You need a team zeik.” My master told me, “I know.” I replied, “Do you have some companions that could fight with you?” he asked. “Yes, I have some friends and they all specialize in one weapon, and there is four of them so that’s perfect for a team.” I replied, I pulled out my cell phone and made some calls… I looked at my team one had a mace, another had knifes, another dual blades, and the other claws. And they all had costumes, I called us the assassins. I walked out onto the arena and the team of opponents came out. “No team assassin?” the leader taunted. I just kept a straight face on, my team slowly started to come out of the tunnel behind me, the crowd cheered and I grinned at the leader. I pulled out my sword and we all ran each other I jumped up and stabbed at the leader, I missed, he kicked at me and I grabbed his foot and kicked him, in a place. He fell over backwards, one of my teammates were being attacked, I walked up behind the opponent stabbed my blade into his back, put my foot on his back and pulled the blade out and kicked him down, I jumped and hit one of the men with my handle and it knocked them out. I pulled out a throwing knife and threw it into a guy’s chest, I fell down and I stepped on his back, jumped off, pulled my hidden blade out and stabbed the last guy in the head and we both fell. I got back up, and the announcer announced that we had won, I looked at Skye. took my hood off, winked and grinned at her, and we all walked into the dark tunnel…

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I walked to my team, and handed them some money in a cloth bag. “Here is your pay” I said, they took it, looked at it and gave it back. “You will not give us money. We are friends, we have your back.” The mace guy said, I nodded to them. “I have some weapon making to do, good bye my friends.” I said and walked away… at the ware house I took a lighter and took off the handle and stuck it onto my gauntlet holding my hidden blade and I put my hand out in front of my and pulled a switch and flames busted from the lighter. I have made a wrist flamethrower, I made one for my other arm, with hidden blade and flame thrower, and made two for each of my feet. I took a handle to a blade and put two long blades on each side to make a blade staff and attached it to my back. I was ready for my next battle… I got into my costume and put on my boots and gauntlets which held my hidden weapons, I strapped a dagger to my ankle, I put my staff on my back and put the sword on the side of my waist. I looked out at all of the heavily armored men, my opponents… “I don’t need you guys today…” I said to dismiss them. I had to try out these weapons by myself… I walked out at the same time as the other team, “It is quite brave of you to stand alone against us, assassin.” The leader taunted, they all ran at me except the leader, I pulled the switches and shot flames at them, half of them fell, I jumped up and used my feet to blow more powerful flames at them, they all fell… I pulled out my hidden blades and walked towards him… I tried to stab him but he grabbed my arm and threw it down into my stomach. “AGH!” I yelled in pain. He kicked me down, I looked around, and my vision was going away. My team suddenly jumped out at them one picked me up. “I told you to stay!” I yelled as my vision slowly came back. “And I said we always have your back! Now finish him!” he yelled and they all left. I looked at my opponent, I walked towards him, and pulled out my hidden blades, then thought for a moment and put them away. I pulled out my staff and started to fight him with his two swords hitting my double bladed staff, he hit me so hard that I fell back onto my back but did a backwards somersault to get back up. He punched at me I dodged it, grabbed his arm, elbowed him in the stomach, then the chest, and then slashed him across the face with my hidden blade. They announced me the winner and I walked into the dark tunnel, but I quickly ducked and a bullet went just over my head, I turned around with a throwing knife and hit it into the guys chest and he died… I walked through the dark tunnel…

[wpp1000]

Well spring break is over so it’s back to school… I walked down the hall, I saw Skye and turned around and started to walk away, “Zeik, hi!” she yelled and ran up in front of me. “Hey.” I said and did my awkward two finger wave. “I saw your battle, are you ok?” she said and put her hand on my side. “Umm…yeah I’m fine, but I have to go.” I said and took her hand away and ran away… I kicked up and barely missed my masters face, he slid down and spun around with his legs out and attempted to trip me but I jumped and it went under me, he punch at me, I hit his fist against my forearm and punched him on the forehead. He smiled and bowed to me…

7 years later…

“You have grown up to be a great man, Zeik.” My master told me, “I think your ready.” He finished. He brought out some die and died my robes black and on my half cape he dyed the sign of the assassin. So now my robes were black and red and my half cape was black with a red assassin sign on it. “You are now the master.” He said and bowed to me; I picked him back up by his hand and hugged him. “Thank you my master.” I said… “Happy 23rd birthday zeik!” I heard my mother say. “Thanks.” I said and opened my eyes, “Oh no, I have my match in ten minutes, will you be there mom?” I asked, “Yes.” She replied. “Cool!” I yelled and grabbed my weapons and costume… I put the costume on and got on all my weapons. “Come out only when I’m attacked.” I said to my team and they nodded and I started to walk out, and then turned around. “Wait, no, use your bow and arrows to take out the team besides the leader, he’s mine.” I said. I walked out and the team started to run at me and the arrows flew from behind me and they fell to the ground, “I see you got a costume change, mommy must be so proud.” He taunted, I pulled the switches and blew flames at him. He jumped in between them, grabbed my hood and threw me towards him and shoved a dagger into my chest, “Agh!” I yelled and pulled it out, I swung at him, and then he backed up, so I quickly threw it at him and it hit him in the back and he fell over. “Owned!” I yelled with a laugh, and I looked at the referee he didn’t announce me winner, I looked down and he stabbed a knife into my leg, I grabbed it out and stabbed it into his back over and over again. “Announce me winner, fast!” I said quickly. “The winner is the assassin!” the referee announced…

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I looked up at my opponent and jumped back onto my hand; I looked at him again and got up onto my feet. I pulled my sword out and clashed it into his, then spun it so it hit his out of his hand. I pulled the dagger from my leg and stabbed into the guys shoulder and knocked him down onto his back, the team ran towards me and my team ran towards the other team. I grinned and heard the sound of a gun firing, I looked down and the leader of the other team had a gun pointed at me, I looked down at my chest, and my robes began to turn a dark red. I took out my hidden blade and cut him so he got back up; he swung at me with his dagger, so I dodged to the side and kicked it out of his hand. He pulled out a long hidden blade and swung at me with it, I leaned backwards and it cut some of my hair. I pulled the switch on top of my arm and small holes came into my knuckles and I aimed it at the leader and closed my eyes, and heard gun fire, I opened my eyes back up, and there were three bullets in his forehead… I pushed his chest foreword and he fell to the ground backwards, and was dead… I got down on my knee and closed his eyes with my fingers. I got back up on my feet, one of the men dove at my face, and I took out my hidden blade and stabbed it up his jaw. And threw his sideways, one of my men got stabbed and he bent over. I jumped onto his back and jumped onto an opponent and stabbed him with my hidden blade. I rolled over one of the men’s backs, then pulled out my dagger and slit his throat with it and kicked him over. I took out two sickles and slid onto my back and pulled a guy over with them, I got back up and stabbed them into his mouth and ripped upwards. One started to run away from me, so I ran at him and jumped on his back and stabbed my hidden blade through him. I walked into my locker room and took my hood off; Skye came in, “Good job.” She said and kissed my on the cheek and walked away, I blushed and began to clean my weapons…